Q: I wrote a song and I would like some opinions?Here it is :
"One way ticket to Imagination" by me
Verse 1:
As I walk down candy cane lane
I see a boat station shaped like a crane
The boats are made of buttered toast
And the driver
A: The first thing I would do is stop using couplets as your rhyme scheme. Meaning line 1 always rhymes with line 2. Most every beginning songwriter does it, and it instantly announces that you're inexperienced. If you try searching some of the song lyrics
"One way ticket to Imagination" by me
Verse 1:
As I walk down candy cane lane
I see a boat station shaped like a crane
The boats are made of buttered toast
And the driver
A: The first thing I would do is stop using couplets as your rhyme scheme. Meaning line 1 always rhymes with line 2. Most every beginning songwriter does it, and it instantly announces that you're inexperienced. If you try searching some of the song lyrics
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